The Troll Writing

  

The troll slowly stomped down the street. He seemed very confused because of the people staring at him. The sailboat the troll was holding was the size of a house! His body and eyes were covered in grass, trees were also growing out of his back. It  looked like he was lost and he’s trying to find a way home. 

My sick sentence I fixed:

The troll stomped down the street like a gorilla. He had a gigantic nose and sharp, yellow teeth. Trees were growing out of his back

Abandoned House Writing

 

I slowly walked through the creepy forest. It was a dark and spooky night.. I kept on walking until I spotted a mysterious, abandoned house with bright, red lights glowing from the windows. I had goosebumps all over my body and my heart started pounding.. Bats were swooping past my head, I took a deep breath and walked through the fog..

My sick sentence I fixed: I slowly walked through the mysterious forest. It was so dark and foggy.. I spotted a spooky, abandoned house with red lights. I hear the trees rustling and I felt the cold breeze on my back.