He looked down. There was still such a long way to go… His heart started beating as fast as a race car, his fingers started shivering. When they lowered him down, splash! A piece of pebble fell into the waterfall and made an echo through the dark cave. His hands were throbbing while holding on the rope. Thud! His sore fingers slipped in the breezy shallow water! “Brrrr…” He put his flashlight on and weakly ran to the dark mysterious cave. Then, a thump started coming closer and closer. It was a… a hungry lion! The lion started leaping across the cave to rip him apart! Unexpectedly, a helicopter threw a ladder down the waterfall and he quickly climbed up. The lion started tearing up the ladder and his foot got jammed! The helicopter started going up, flying him away safely and the lion fell down into the waterfall and hit his head onto a gigantic rock. Crash! He died.
Hi Lila,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your creative writing. I particularly liked how you have used a lot of onomatopoeias to describe the sounds in your story and they make your writing much more lively and interesting. Keep blogging your learning. I am looking forward to reading your next story. Jo
Hi Lila, I am glad you decided to post this writing on your blog. I agree with Miss Green, great use of onomatopoeia to add interest and impact to your story. Tino pai Lila!
ReplyDeleteWow!!! What an action packed piece of writing Lila. Shame about the lion dying but I'm glad the man survived :-) Maria
ReplyDeleteHi Lila your writing was very interesting,it reminded me when I dug a cave. Do you have anymore awsome writing ideas?
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